In the rewrites I decided that Urge starts off on Earth. Unlike the original, the Numina of Urban Numina are often on the planet in disguise - goading and guiding people as their natures drive them to.
Urge's nature is one that I want to tease out over the course of the film. We learn more about Urge through his actions than his words because while he talks a big game, he often isn't telling the truth. But his actions rarely lie.
The rewrite of the first scene still has Ziana and Urge talking, but Ziana has taken on a more authoritative tone. She instructs Urge rather than chats with him, and Urge - in response - seems to not really take her too seriously. There is an as yet to be revealed reason for this.
The thing I found is that I'm not 100% happy with the scene. It probably runs about a minute too long without anything particularly exciting happening in it. The purpose of the scene is to set up Urge's motivation for tracking down Deus, and introduce Ziana as well as explain why she doesn't just show up and do things herself.
The thing is, it is possible to get caught up on a single scene and obsess about it over and over in the attempt to get it right. But this can make script writing a slow and painful process. The other issue is that this can lead to me losing the thread of the film. So what needs to be done is to wrestle out a completion to the scene, and keep moving.
It will be much easier for me to go back to the scene after all my other rewrites and tighten it up than to try and wrestle it into perfection to only find that a later scene requires me to still go back and do a rewrite anyway.
So I have moved on to the next big scene, Deus' formal introduction to the flatmates. This is the scene in the series where Deus and Devon come out and talk to Carey, Mel and Andrea. Here we learn that a) Deus is a God and b) he can't remember anything about who he is.
One of the big changes in this scene is going to be the introduction of Anima. In the original script, Anima appeared during this scene but was invisible to all the other characters. Due to a scheduling issue, Bex was unavailable during the series shoot and so I rewrote the scene as the odd dream sequence at the beginning of episode two.
In this version, Anima is going to simply be watching Deus - a foreshadowing of her involvement.
The other big change is Jenna's entry into the lounge while Deus is in the room. This is to reinforce the relationship between Jenna and Mel, and to give her character a more integral reason to be involved in the events that follow.
Currently I have reached the point where Devon introduces Deus. I have decided to also take another approach to their relationship. Unlike the series, Devon will not be falling all over Deus. He is still in "I love Rhys" mode, and so his attitude to Deus' advances will be more those of frustration at Deus' interfering. Deus is going to have to show more of who he is - and in order to do that he needs to learn more about who he is. Which should act as a great motivator.
I'll write more about this scene tomorrow.
Conan
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